tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6336480024326420194.post5442801723167057336..comments2024-03-15T08:49:44.929-04:00Comments on Dreams and Dragons: Fight Song Chapter 10Sarah Penningtonhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06377945004067760298noreply@blogger.comBlogger8125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6336480024326420194.post-32707920801921242722018-04-07T07:58:28.822-04:002018-04-07T07:58:28.822-04:00It wasn't that bad. Mostly annoying. But yeah,...It wasn't that bad. Mostly annoying. But yeah, all is well . . . for me, if not for my characters. xD Thanks for commenting!Sarah Penningtonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06377945004067760298noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6336480024326420194.post-63601125886325684222018-04-06T23:51:43.341-04:002018-04-06T23:51:43.341-04:00A tornado warning sounds just terrifying- I'm ...A tornado warning sounds just terrifying- I'm glad all is well!<br />...then again, maybe not ALL is well. Poor Callie!Bluehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07311819189733225274noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6336480024326420194.post-17046919991307926792018-04-06T22:07:15.658-04:002018-04-06T22:07:15.658-04:00Haha, I'm glad. :D
Thanks for letting me know ...Haha, I'm glad. :D<br />Thanks for letting me know about those. The whole book was originally written in present tense, so, yeah, sometimes I forget to switch it back. And the reason Callie's violin doesn't come up again is that she doesn't really have time to try to do anything with it, but I'll try to make that clearer.<br /><br />I had to research how to defend against multiple opponents at once, so I asked my substitute martial arts instructor. And, apparently, part of the exercise he uses for learning to deal with multiple opponents is the whole zombie routine. It worked, though, so I'm not complaining.Sarah Penningtonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06377945004067760298noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6336480024326420194.post-90705828931335319792018-04-06T21:28:14.011-04:002018-04-06T21:28:14.011-04:00Glad you're okay! :D
“What do you want with m...Glad you're okay! :D<br /><br />“What do you want with me? Money? I’ve got five bucks; you can have it.”<br />I know this was a serious scene and all, but I couldn't help chuckling a bit at this. :P<br />There are a handful of tense changes ("decide" instead of "decided", "who've" instead of "who"), but overall very clean. The only other thing I noticed was the fact that Callie's violin is mentioned once before she's attacked, then not at all during/after. :)<br /><br />What did you have to research??Marlene Simonettehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06467939783399662851noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6336480024326420194.post-85686100167963779772018-04-06T07:28:19.130-04:002018-04-06T07:28:19.130-04:00Yep, I am! And I haven't heard of any signific...Yep, I am! And I haven't heard of any significant damage so far, though apparently someone did see an actual funnel cloud.<br />Thanks! I should hope I've improved since Berstru, since I wrote the first one, what, almost six years ago? But, yeah, I appreciate that people can TELL it's improved. <br />Thanks for commenting!Sarah Penningtonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06377945004067760298noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6336480024326420194.post-49211086713346575032018-04-05T23:13:15.696-04:002018-04-05T23:13:15.696-04:00Ay, you're alive! did the tornado end up doing...Ay, you're alive! did the tornado end up doing anything?<br />Also, I'm quite happy to see these coming up here again. Your writing has definitely improved a ton since Berstru and such, (you remember how much I liked those) and I have been thoroughly enjoying Fight Song. Unfortunately I'm too tired (again) to actually figure out what has improved so. That's also why this comment might seem weird. I should be in bed.<br /><br />Lertaen Miklul<br />aka LakiklulAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6336480024326420194.post-53735001909424505162018-04-05T20:04:16.186-04:002018-04-05T20:04:16.186-04:00You're quite forgiven, though I do hope that y...You're quite forgiven, though I do hope that you'll go back and read the rest since you enjoyed this chapter! And "Echoes from the Edge" was one of my inspirations, so, yeah! Thank you very much for reading and commenting!Sarah Penningtonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06377945004067760298noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6336480024326420194.post-21204710331213687922018-04-05T17:31:23.287-04:002018-04-05T17:31:23.287-04:00AAAHHH! I know it's a particularly uncouth thi...AAAHHH! I know it's a particularly uncouth thing to come tramping in when the title reads "chapter 10" and you've not yet read chapter 1... but I had reduced time availability (blame my schedule). This is really good though! I am intrigued. I particularly like the use of music as a weapon (very much so). This gives me "Echoes from the Edge" by Bryan Davis vibes. Very delightful :)Mackenzie A. Lockharthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04302830070915731520noreply@blogger.com