tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6336480024326420194.post2431059487108754190..comments2024-03-15T08:49:44.929-04:00Comments on Dreams and Dragons: I'll Take the LashesSarah Penningtonhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06377945004067760298noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6336480024326420194.post-15754131565454543202018-01-26T09:26:45.381-05:002018-01-26T09:26:45.381-05:00Heh, you sound like an author. xD Anyway. I'm ...Heh, you sound like an author. xD Anyway. I'm very glad you liked it! Thanks for reading!Sarah Penningtonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06377945004067760298noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6336480024326420194.post-69269440734658204532018-01-26T09:26:10.095-05:002018-01-26T09:26:10.095-05:00I'm glad you liked it! Thank you for reading!I'm glad you liked it! Thank you for reading!Sarah Penningtonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06377945004067760298noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6336480024326420194.post-2070050539141933412018-01-25T01:52:41.064-05:002018-01-25T01:52:41.064-05:00I love the 'you pick who we'll hurt, for t...I <i>love</i> the 'you pick who we'll hurt, for the sake of the others' scenarios. I mean, they're horrible! and traumatic! and there's so much character torture! (now I sound terrible... :| ) So I really enjoyed this story; thank you for sharing, Sarah! :D<br />- <a href="https://jemjoneswriter.blogspot.com" rel="nofollow">Jem Jones</a>Jem Joneshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00283849842223000389noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6336480024326420194.post-56583864884467236082018-01-22T20:39:35.115-05:002018-01-22T20:39:35.115-05:00Danke! Yeah, Hawaiian/Pasifika (I assume that'...Danke! Yeah, Hawaiian/Pasifika (I assume that's the official term for people-from-the-Pacific-Islands-in-general) is what I was going for, so I'm glad it worked. Still working on speech patterns in general for people of that culture (to differentiate them more from Berstruers later on), but yeah. <br /><br />Thank you for your criticism; I appreciate the input. I will say that I knew when I started the story that Jaku was going to volunteer, and I don't think I'll change that if/when I rework this (which I quite possibly might), but I probably will try to change it so Makatala still has to make a choice. As for why the captain accepts Jaku, but not Makatala- I tried to explain some in-story why he won't let Makatala take the beating (he wants her alive; she has information and status on the islands that'll help him achieve his goals). But given that his goal is also to try to break Makatala somewhat, it would make more sense for her to not accept another volunteer (at least, since he doesn't know Jaku's not part of the crew). <br /><br />Anyway. Thank you once again for the comments! I appreciate that you took the time to give such good suggestions.Sarah Penningtonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06377945004067760298noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6336480024326420194.post-19923122802491113372018-01-22T19:16:25.780-05:002018-01-22T19:16:25.780-05:00I like it! The name style is quite different from ...I like it! The name style is quite different from the European normal, which is nice—they sound as if they have Hawaiian or Pasifika inspiration. I'm playing around with languages and how they affect linguistics on my world, so I paid careful attention to your naming style here. :)<br /><br />My criticism: The moral dilemma your character faces is an excellent one because it asks her to choose which member of her crew will be injured. The social consequences on board ship would last long beyond escaping the pirates, and making her unable to pick herself is also an excellent choice. Why did the pirate captain let her off the hook? Jaku picks himself, the same thing Makatala tried, but this time the pirate captain accepts the volunteer. In effect, I would have liked to see Makatala make a choice and live with the consequences.Dmitri Pendragonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06504235638226928257noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6336480024326420194.post-31313711281666746892018-01-22T00:08:53.535-05:002018-01-22T00:08:53.535-05:00Great story! It's bee a long time since I'...Great story! It's bee a long time since I've read a pirate story, but I've always loved the genre. I might just have to get back into it now. Thanks for sharing! :DEmmarayn Reddinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15906735934810971194noreply@blogger.com